When did she allow herself to turn into a punching bag?
A willing dart-board,
A mass of flesh into which is showered punches,kicks,abuse,slaps and other slimy stuff.
When did she become Insignificant,
Unworthy,
Identity-less,
And Worthless.
When did she lose the minimum amount of self-respect needed to qualify as a human?
And inadvertently transform herself into a sub-human!
A garbage can.
Don't look into her now.
Don't open the lid.
(or if u do,do it at your own risk)
The garbage has long since decomposed.
Rotted into a nameless "stinking nauseating thing".
She waited for a knight in shining armour to empty her garbage.
To cleanse her
And stop the stink.
To make her fragrant
And human again.
To give her back her Self.
Her waiting has been in vain so far...(an eternal wait this is going to be)
The knights did her the favour of adding more to the filth...
The garbage has begun over-flowing,outgrowing the lid.
When will she realise that she has to empty the garbage herself?
She has to cleanse herself and become whole again.
She has to regain her Self.
But all on her own.
No crutches,no support.
She has only SHE for company.
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The garbage was overflowing from the can, it stank and it seemed like the smell could never be scrubbed clean. She reached inside and started to pull the garbage out. She was surprised how easy it was. Near the bottom of the can the garbage was oldest and hardest to remove. It took her a long time. She had to scrub and work hard. She almost gave up, but she remembered how horrible it had been and kept going. When she reached the very bottom of the can she felt something hard under the dirt. She cleaned some more and a blinding light filled the can. She blinked. The light was warm. It banished the stink and the darkness from the can. She picked it up. It was the most beauiful diamond she had ever seen. As she held it in her hands she realised that she was not a garbage can, she was a beautiful human and that she was never alone, no matter how dark it grew. She held the diamond to her chest and it was absorbed into her body. The light emanated from her fingers and toes, her eyes and her mouth and her ears. It shattered the garbage can, got rid of all the rubbish. She walked away, the light still inside her and when she met people, she was able to see the ones whose light shone from them and those who had covered it with layers of fear and doubt and self hatred. She found she could help them blast away their garbage too. She never saw herself as a garbage can ever again.
You are not alone. Please never ever ever let someone use you as a punching bag. There are many people who will help you until you are able to help yourself. Even when it seems you have come so far that you can't go back, you can change things.
Inkpot..thank-you for your comment..your lines are deeply inspiring,postive and motivational..my lines were dark,bleak and black..thank-you for infusing it with the "light" it needed.
Life has much more to offer than pessimism......love, care, hope, freedom.....release
Anonymous..thank-you for your comment..you are so right..life can be beautiful also.
Nishaa, that was so touching, and sad and soo meaningful, and then Inkpot balanced the same situation with something so lovely. Its like the two writings go hand in hand, perfectly intertwined.
Yes, I agree with Inkpot's note 100%, there is another side, another opening, and a diamond at the end. We have to be willing to see it and do whatever it is to get to it.
Great writing girls! I think I'm going to back and read them all over again.
Oh, and I am happy you are back to writing. I hope you write more often!
SSQuo..thank-you so much for your comments...i agree with you completely that Inkpot's lines gave what i wrote a complete feel..made it whole in fact!
Yes,i hope to write more often..thanks for your encouraging words again!
Hey nishaa..
Inkpots version may help make things balanced, but as a writer you need to remember that it isnt only about balance. Most times it needs to tip over to one side or the other.
In its own way it was the bleakness of the poem, ending with the idea that:
She has to regain her Self.
But all on her own.
No crutches,no support.
She has only SHE for company.
this brings that little ray of hope, confidence and self-awareness.. the realisation that life isnt as wondrous as what we are taught as children and also that it isnt as horrible as we imagined but in fact it is what we make of it.
THAT kind of feeling is what made me enjoy your original poem.
But in the end as the writer you have to listen to all the readers (good and bad alike) but the final decision on what is produced must be yours, it is your work, your words, your world.
You have talent and of that you should be proud and I hope you keep it alive.
Cheers.
Hey Dude..thank-you so much for your comment..from all the responses i got it seemed that the poem conveyed a sense of debilitating loneliness and misery while failing rather miserably to convey the sense of inner strength or self-reliance which i had intended to in the closing lines(and about which Inkpot so beautifully wrote)...happy that it managed to convey the intended meaning to you...it hasn't fallen flat on its nose completely then(in terms of conveying what it was intended to convey).
Will keep in mind what u said about writing not being only about balance...made sense to me.
thanks again for the encouragement.
always happy to help, and dont feel bad that people didnt get it. often these things are obvious but people cant or wont see it for what its meant to be instead there is so much sadness everywhere that they see it too literally.
keep writing and feel free to drop a line anytime.
cheers.
she was waiting her knight to
rescue her from the plight, all he did was hurt her and made her suffer more... that was beautifully said...
Apocalypse..thank-you so much for your comment..ya,waiting for anyone to make one feel better or whole or complete is a complete waste of time and emotion.
Dude,always good to hear what you have to say...makes sense to me..thanks a lot.
this is comment from keep smiling always and at times add laughter
I find here you enjoy writing what you are good at it imagining and feeling and expressing it.keep it up
Now I want you to look at this scene when Charming prince arrives and in your words let us know what happened
hi Nisha.... don't be pesimism...life is beautiful...only thing is one should have an eye to see it heart to feel it...keep writing...
by the way why don't you start a blog in your own mother tongue...?so that more people can read your posting...was searching for the user friendly Indian Language typing tool and found 'quillpad'..u can go through it...hope u will start the same...
take care...
Anonymous(keep smiling and add laughter!)...thank-you very much for your kind words..Anon,even if i picture Prince Charming arriving he is sure to turn into Prince Abuse in a jiffy...but thanks a lot for trying to get me to write a happy and cheerful post!
Anonymous..thank-you for your encouraging words..i'm not very confident aboout my malayalam writing skills but will definitely take a look at quillpad..thanks a lot for telling me about it..
Hi Nishaa,
I came to see a new one,
then read this...
I liked the way you pour yourself, here Nishaa...
I too do that,
perhaps you know that by now...
Keep writing, write more often :)
wishes,
devika
Devika,thanks a lot for your kind comment...its so encouraging coming from a writer like yourself..i would very much like to write more often but i just about manage to write one in a month!....i hope to improve that statistic!...thanks again for commenting.
Hello Nishu am not a writer to comment on your beautiful writings bt as a passive reader i felt as if i was her bcoz as humans we all have to go through ups and downs and it depends on how he or she confronts it... any situations in life can be dealt either positively or negatively and this determines what we gain and lose as a person.....so be +VE.
vanda..your lines are so strong and positive!..you are so completely right..yes,we all have to go through our ups and downs and more often than not it is our attitude to it that determines how negative or positive the situation really is...
I also feel that when it comes down to the core it is each person for himself/herself...in that sense every person is alone and should learn to be self-reliant.
thanks again vanda..lots of love to you!
good work, keep writing
It is rather interesting for me to read this blog. Thanks for it. I like such themes and anything connected to them. I would like to read a bit more soon.
Don't stop posting such articles. I like to read articles like that. By the way add more pics :)
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